I received a slight nudge from my Lead Comic Tester to tone down the language.
He and/or she took offense to "whipped it out," saying it made the character less sweetly innocent and the punchline less surprising/cute.
He/She/It wants cartoon Tony to come across as an incorrigible goofball who is prone to wacky tangents spawned from his overactive imagination.
I just wrote that line originally and it made me chuckle.
Here's the third and final attempt at this strip. Nothing I make is ever perfect, and certainly no art is ever truly finished.
Just messing around, here.
I haven't even begun the actual STORY strips, yet!
Keep the feedback coming, people. And enjoy this kinder, gentler version of "Why Not?"
1 comment:
Nice. I'm glad this project is underway... Toon Murray is almost as awesome as Real Murray. And I'll read anything that has pee and poo jokes in it, so I'm hooked.
Keep up the good work. (I also kinda liked seeing the revision/editing progression take place.)
Toon on!
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